Exercicis de writing B1: email formal i essay — Anglès 4t ESO

A la conclusió. ('To sum up' i la reformulació de l'opinió són pròpies del paràgraf final)

Una idea o argument per paràgraf, perquè el text quedi clar i estructurat; cada argument s'acompanya d'una explicació o exemple.

In conclusion / To sum up / All in all. (introdueix la conclusió)

a) informal (salutació col·loquial)
b) formal (destinatari desconegut)
c) formal (comiat estàndard)
d) informal (comiat entre amics)

Amb 'Dear Sir or Madam' (no coneixem el nom): Yours faithfully.
Amb 'Dear Mr Brown' (coneixem el nom): Yours sincerely.
Regla: sense nom, faithfully; amb nom, sincerely.

La fórmula habitual per explicar el motiu d'un email formal és I am writing to + infinitiu.
I am writing to complain about a faulty product.

En escrits formals no s'usen contraccions.
I cannot attend because I do not have time.

L'ordre habitual és:
1. introduction (presenta el tema i la teva opinió)
2. body paragraph 1
3. body paragraph 2
4. conclusion (resumeix i reafirma l'opinió)

L'expressió fixa per donar l'opinió és In my opinion.
In my opinion, school uniforms are a good idea.

Look forward to va seguit de gerundi (-ing), perquè to és aquí una preposició.
I look forward to hearing from you.

I would be grateful if you could send me more information. (fórmula formal, sense contraccions ni abreviatures)

Salutació: Dear Sir or Madam. Comiat: Yours faithfully. (destinatari desconegut → Sir or Madam / faithfully)

In conclusion, I believe the negative effects of social media outweigh its benefits. (reformula la mateixa opinió amb altres paraules)

Moreover / Furthermore / In addition. (afegeix una idea a favor)

Model de resposta: Homework is a controversial topic in many schools. In my opinion, homework should not be banned, because it helps students to revise and to learn responsibility.
La frase ha de presentar el tema i la postura (thesis).

Model: I am afraid that I will not be able to attend the interview on Monday.
Altra opció: I apologise, but I am unable to attend…
Hem eliminat sorry i can't i hem usat un vocabulari més formal (attend).

Model de resposta: I am writing to enquire about the summer English course advertised on your website.
Alternativa: I would like to request some information about…
Cal usar enquire o request i no ask for en un email formal.

b) topic sentence: idea principal
c) explanation: desenvolupa la idea
a) example: la concreta
Ordre correcte del paràgraf: b, c, a.

Introdueix una opinió contrària: On the other hand o However.
Els dos porten una coma darrere.

Per exemple:
In my opinion, …
From my point of view, …
As far as I am concerned, …
També: I strongly believe that…

Model de resposta: Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to know whether you have any vacancies. Thank you for your help. Yours faithfully,
Hem eliminat els col·loquialismes, wanna i les abreviatures.

I am writing to apply for a job in your company. (en anglès es diu 'I am writing to...', no 'I write you because...')

Public transport is good for the environment. For example, one bus can replace dozens of cars and reduce pollution in city centres. (argument + exemple concret)

Although it is expensive, I think it is worth it. (davant d'una frase amb verb s'usa 'although', no 'despite')

Hi ha dos errors: l'ortografia de writing i l'estructura de finalitat.
I am writing to you to ask for information about the course.
Error típic: traduir «per demanar» com for ask.

Model de resposta: Some people argue that homework is useless because students are tired after school. However, I believe that homework helps students to practise what they have learnt. For example, solving maths exercises at home prepares them for exams.
Estructura: concessió, refutació, exemple.

Model de resposta: Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to enquire about availability at your summer camp in July. I would like to reserve a place for my brother, who is 12 years old. Could you please tell me the price, the dates and what activities are included? I would also be grateful if you could send me the registration form. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Laia Serra
Comprova: salutació, motiu, peticions amb could, comiat adequat.

Model de resposta: Mobile phones are part of our daily life, but should they be allowed at school? Some people think they are useful tools for learning. However, in my opinion, teenagers should not use them in class because they are a distraction.
Cal: gancho, context i tesi clara.

Model de resposta: I like cycling because it is both healthy and cheap.
Altra versió: I enjoy cycling for two reasons. Firstly, it is healthy. Moreover, it is cheap.
S'ha evitat repetir el subjecte i el verb.

1. Registre informal: salutació (Hi!), gonna i contraccions, impropis d'un text acadèmic.
2. Falta de tesi: no es defensa cap opinió ni cap argument.
3. Estructura i extensió: no hi ha cos amb arguments i exemples, ni conclusió real; els connectors són inexistents.